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RE: [cosmos-dev] COSMOS demo presentation
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David,
Here are some minor corrections:
First paragraph on slide 2:
Milestone
1 (M1) shows is an => Milestone
1 (M1) is an
Service
Modeling Language => Service
Modeling Language
(SML)
Slide 4: Part of item number 5 is missing
and the bullet under this fragment has a couple of extra
words:
This
node is a represents a => This node represents a
Slide
5:
In the
fourth non-indented bullet:
on
top of data store. => on top of a data
store.
In the
sixth (last) non-indented bullet:
Since
the Data Sink is a pluggable => Since the Data Sink and Data Query
Service components are pluggable
any
type if data store => any type of data store
The
major points in slides 5 and 6 should be numbers instead of bullets like slides
3 and 4 to differentiate them from the indented bullets.
Slide
7: The text in the box on the lower left:
SML-IF
FIle => SML-IF
File
Finally, I would change the text in the first bullet on slide 6 from
this:
The
Data Collection component of COSMOS consists of two major pieces, Collection
Assemblies and Query Assemblies.
to something like
this:
The
Data Collection component of COSMOS provides an extensible collection
of components which may be configured into a set of Data Collection Assemblies
and Query Assemblies.
Regards,
Don
Hello all,
I have uploaded a powerpoint presentation Mark and I
developed that is to accompany our end-to-end demo. It is accessible from the
main page of the Wiki. Please take some time to look it over - it's only 8
slides, so it shouldn't take too long to review. Please send me any corrections,
questions, issues, etc. as soon as possible so we can fix it up and put a bow on
it.
Here's the direct link: http://wiki.eclipse.org/Image:COSMOS_Demo_ppt_M1.zip
Thanks,
David
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